Conventions of Composition Rule 204 Practice

1. Weak: Eden is clever and kind.

Better: Eden can figure out any problem and loves to help her friends.

Explanation: Is merely equated Eden with clever and kind. Action verbs make the sentence more interesting and lively.

2. Weak: In Ebba's room, there is no room for more sports equipment.

Better: Ebba couldn't fit another piece of sports equipment into her room if she tried.

Explanation: The action verb wakes up the sentence.

3. Weak: The reason Sora didn't show up is because she had a big test the next day.

Better: Sora didn't show up because she had a big test the next day.

Explanation: The action verb help the sentence sound livelier in fewer words.

4. Weak: Imani knows that she is the smartest student in the class.

Better: Imani knows that she understands more than the other students.

Explanation: Livelier = better.